The two areas my paper needed work is a weak thesis statement and bad MLA citations. I need to revamp  my MLA skills and need to rewrite my thesis statement. I am also needing to fix my works cited page. My works cited page is not in alphabetical order and needs the last names to go first and to be indented. I need to not exactly rewrite my paper but I planing on writing it over this weekend. I need to make paragraphs right now my paper is one long paragraph it's ridiculous and I'm embarrassed. So basically what I see when looking over my edited paper from the professor is to fix the paragraphs and figure out the proper way to cite MLA also and strengthen my thesis.